The Day They Made Durga

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... and so it was in this bygone age that the Trimurti stood together on a hilltop overlooking the battlefield, their proxies and attendants waiting nearby. Below them, Arvandor was burning - the tanar'ri army had won the day once more. Led by the fallen asura prince Mahish, they seemed unstoppable. The demonic host was cutting a path into the upper planes, slowly approaching Mount Meru, the seat of power of the Hindu pantheon.
The Trimurti observed for a time before the Lord Destroyer addressed his peers.

"Verily, we are boned."

"Oh, do shut up, Shiva" replied the Lord Preserver. "This is all your fault anyway."

"My fault? How exactly is it my fault if Brahma's idea of amusement is bestowing the power of invulnerability on his asura pet?"

"Well, you were the one that voted against sending reinforcements to Indra when Mahishasura got out of hand and started gating demons into Limbo. We could've stopped them at Swarga, and instead..." the Lord Preserver gestured toward the battlefield below.

"Indra's an asshole, anyway" said Shiva, waving his mighty trident dismissively "and stopping them back in Limbo wouldn't have been any easier than stopping them here. Why don't you go ask Creator boy over there how he's going to deal with his invulnerable asura?"

The third of the Trimurti kept his silence, sitting calmly upon the back of the Garuda bird. Shiva and Vishnu kept on bickering, and once the Brahma had heard enough, he raised his hand. The other two fell silent and turned respectfully to hear what Brahma had to say (for although technically equals of the Lord Creator, the lords of Preservation and Destruction possessed lesser personal power in those days, when the planes were still young)

"Even the Trimurti make mistakes, and today we have to face the consequences of one." said the Lord Creator gravely.

"I can't undo the gift of invulnerability that I gave to Mahish, because it is not in my power to undo anything. And no, you can't undo it either Shiva, because the time when your gift will be able to overpower one of mine is still far. Still ... perhaps together we can create something that will undo both the invulnerability and the rebel asura scum as well. If, that is, you are willing to sacrifice of yourself."

"Of myself? You mean give up a part of my essence so that you can forge some... weapon out of it?" asked Lord Destroyer, disbelief obvious in his voice.

"I don't like it any more than you do, and it might turn out to be a new mistake, the consequences of which I cannot even begin to predict. Still, if we do not act now, I'm afraid even the Great Wheel itself could eventually be stopped. And where would that leave our retirement plans?"

Gasps were generally issued, as the other deities thought of their precious retirement plans, those small and tastefully decorated demiplanes to which they would retreat after the cycle had completed... Eventually, Vishnu's laughter broke the stunned silence.

"Wait, you two give up some of your strength to unite forces? Sounds great to me, except whatever it is you build will never hold."

"That's where you come in, sibling. You'll also have to sacrifice of yourself to make our creation permanent. Besides, did you think we would willingly diminish ourselves and leave you dominant? Really, little brother. Think of the balance issues for once, would you?"

"Oh. Weak." said Vishnu, and Shiva just snickered.

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And thus had the Trimurti joined their powers for the first and last time. Brahma took earth, blood, and iron from the battlefield, and shaped it into a humanoid form with many limbs. In his wisdom, he made it into a female, so that they could easily pour their divine essence into the creature.

Brahma stepped forward, opening his crown chakra, and spoke: "I name you Durga, and Shakti, and Devi. I name you Strength, goddess. Rise."

Next was Vishnu, who gave from his heart chakra, and sang to the stirring entity: "I name you Parvati, and Uma. I name you Light, goddess. Rise."

Finally, Shiva approached and opened his sacral chakra, whispering to her: "I name you Kali. I name you Murder, goddess. Rise."

And so she did.

The goddess of many names opened her eyes, and blades of iron extended from her body. She stood, and her beauty was so great that all creatures averted their eyes, except a proxy called Krishna, who came closer and said "Well, hello therrraaaargh!"

She saddled a lion, and rode singing toward the screaming tanar'ri horde.

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Much later, after the demons had been routed, the fires put out, and the head of Mahishasura presented to the Trimurti, the newborn Power left to create her own realm. Shiva suggested she could always crash at the Vortex if she liked, but that initiative went down like a led balloon.

All the gods of the pantheon were quite impressed by the new member; even the usually jealous goddesses were intrigued by the idea of a universal female power present in them all, and the seeds of several warrior-mother cults were planted that day.

The few sad remains of mortal armies that had been thrown at the demons as cannon fodder huddled together, uncertain how, when, or if they would get back home. The particularly vicious among them were retelling the unknown goddess's ferocity and battle prowess. The first statuettes were being carved from wood and stone. Strangling cords were being sanctified. Even though millennia would pass before Durga evolved from her warrior aspect and toward the murdering whore that rules the Caverns of Skulls today, the mortals sensed that the Age of Iron would eventually come.

The song of Kali had begun.

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Amazing. Now that's mythology the way it's supposed to be.

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Bitchin'.

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Thanks.

No linguistic objections? I'm generally loath to write fiction in english... but then again, when I see all the horrible spelling and grammar that you native speakers upload to Chronicles, I'm kinda encouraged Sticking out tongue

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Only one mistake I noticed- "Shiva suggested she could always crash at the Vortex if she liked, but that initiative went down like a led balloon."

This should be spelled "lead".

That's it. We native english speakers seldom completely learned all the rules of our language, so if you broke any small ones it's unlikely anyone who's not a grammer nazi will notice.

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"Ohtar Turinson" wrote:
Only one mistake I noticed- "Shiva suggested she could always crash at the Vortex if she liked, but that initiative went down like a led balloon."

This should be spelled "lead".

I actually thought that was a cunning reference to Led Zeppelin Eye-wink

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That's very funny. Maybe you should submit your entry to Godchecker. They make mythology funny too. Here's their entry on the Morrigan.

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The particularly vicious among them were retelling the unknown goddess's ferocity and battle prowess. The first statuettes were being carved from wood and stone. Strangling cords were being sanctified.

retelling stories of the unknown goddess' ferocity and battle-prowess. The first statuettes [of her visage] were being...

But who cares, really? They're just thugs anyway. Laughing out loud

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"Anarch" wrote:
I actually thought that was a cunning reference to Led Zeppelin Eye-wink

:cry:

All right kids, you can stop making fun of the poor typo-prone third-worlder now...

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"Krypter" wrote:
The first statuettes [of her visage]

Of her entire form, generally, not just her visage (which generally connotates only the face). All the good statues of Kali show her arms at least.

"Her first representations..." might be better. Or, even better, "Her first images..."

Nemui, you have nothing to worry about in the grammar department. As far as I can tell, you've got the language nailed.

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No need to get pedantic, rip, any of those terms will do. Visage can mean 'general appearance' as well.

Nemui, you're as fine a writer on these boards as any. Doesn't mean you're perfect, of course. We could all do with a spot of improvement in our writing. It's the idea, not the grammar, that most concerns me. Keep it up.

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"Krypter" wrote:
No need to get pedantic, rip, any of those terms will do. Visage can mean 'general appearance' as well. .

Sorry, but I'm really, really particular about words. Best to avoid "visage" if you want to avoid unwanted connotations; a reader who knew nothing of Hindu iconography would read "face" from that sentence if no other clues are given.

I'm sure your efforts to help Nemui were both substantial and appreciated; I was just trying to make your efforts more helpful still.

I never use a word if I can think of a more accurate one. No offense or pedantry intended; I think it's a basic (the most basic) part of writing. Writing is about communicating, after all. "Visage" does so poorly in this particular instance.

Maybe I'm fussy, but I think it's important.

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"Nemui" wrote:
:cry: All right kids, you can stop making fun of the poor typo-prone third-worlder now...
Hon - you're doing fine. Eye-wink I would never have guessed you weren't a native speaker.

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"ripvanwormer" wrote:
Sorry, but I'm really, really particular about words. Best to avoid "visage" if you want to avoid unwanted connotations; a reader who knew nothing of Hindu iconography would read "face" from that sentence if no other clues are given.
I was thinking of her face when I wrote that, because I always liked her stuck-out red tongue on a black face, so the connotation is accurate. There are some cool Kali masks out there; my dad had two. Regardless, it was merely a suggestion of words (because a word was needed in that place), and Nemui can use whatever word he intended.

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"Krypter" wrote:
Regardless, it was merely a suggestion of words (because a word was needed in that place), and Nemui can use whatever word he intended.

Righto. I hope that's the sense in which my post was taken as well.

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All this talk about visage, visage, visage. My last name is Visage. AND my husband's name is Frank = honest. Honest Face. Laughing out loud But I swear to you all it IS the truth. And he lives up to his name, he does have an honest face (except when he has perma-scowl going on LoL) I have always found that fascinating, and now I get to bring up the topic! Laughing out loud

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