Killing Lady of Pain article in Queue

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Killing Lady of Pain article in Queue

So Clueless said we could put some partially formed ideas in the queue, and while it is pretty much a complete draft I wanted to get feedback from people. As it stands, the estimated length of the article is 30 pages, though a lot of that is because I included background information on stuff people outside of this site might not know about. Without background I suspect the article to shrink considerably.

I made two references that will likely require author permission - Rip's Mithral Lodge and Shemmy's Demented (though none of the Demented from the SH are named, just a vague reference that I was thinking might include a link.)

I'm happy to remove both of those if the authors disapprove.

Definitely feel free to critique. I will take a break from it in order to ensure the other two articles I said I'd guarantee get submitted to the editor queue, but I'll continue the discussion and definitely take criticism to heart. Will probably do a rewrite next week.

I deliberated a lot about tone and conveying information, settling on the idea that Earth as we know it is part of the Multiverse.

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Re: Killing Lady of Pain article in Queue

[rubs her hands together]

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Can anyone come up with a quick list of a) deities associated with death/murder and b) nihilistic deities that want to destroy the multiverse/all creation? Bhaal, Cyric, and Nerull come up quickly for a) but I'm sure there are others.

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Re: Killing Lady of Pain article in Queue

My biggest crit?

At 30 pages - that's not an article - that's a *book*. Splat books like Tomb and Blood are 30pgs long. So for an article - that's ungodly huge. Slim it down for an article or fluff it up a little (if that!) into a book and we can develop it as it's own download.

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That sounds like a plan. I think I'll cut out the "Lady is a Vestige" part, as well as nip and tuck some other parts that could be in a PDF that could be put out at a future date. Some of the more far fetched methods can be taken out (dream larva, mirror magic) as they're foundations are flimsier. There's stuff relating to time travel on Oerth that can be taken out.

A lot of the references and summaries of past adventures can go as well.

I'll keep these things around, and when time permits ideally put into some kind of PDF that is more fleshed out.

It's funny that I was just really worried the article would be too short, then when I posted it and saw the estimated page count my eyes went wide.

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Oh yeah Smiling That happens all the time. It's amazing how few words fit in how much space. If you ever saw Dragon mag's old column word counts, we're not that far off from them.

A lot of the additional ideas can be reused and fluffed up into articles of their own later, or go shooting off into their own directions. It's a lot of material to work with to develop up.

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After talking this over with Clueless, I'm going to replace the article in the queue with a much trimmed version. I'll put the original here in a bit in case there are ideas that people want to run with for future articles.

I'd really like to split the article over the first two issues, as at 16 something pages I like the idea of having two 8 page features that we don't need to stress out about for the first two issues. The theme for the second issue could be Planar Metropolises if people are amenable.

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Added conclusion. Definitely feel free to critique this thing, one thing I know needs work is the flow between sections. Really want this to be quality!

thanks,

Sci

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